Book review: Makenna Goldwin’s Story by D. Fischer

Makenna Goldwin's Story by D.  Fischer

Song:

Maroon 5 – Animals

**The book was generously provided by the author in exchange for an honest review.**

Not bad for a first book. It could use some more work though, but I’ll talk about that later.

So the story is about Makenna Goldwin (duh! the title), a PI with empath abilities. She feels what people around her feel and it helps her in her work as she is basically a walking lie detector. She was asked by an FBI agent to assist in an interrogation of a man, suspected in abducting and possibly killing women all over the area. That agent, Evo, turns out to be a wolf-shifter and an Alpha at that, also her mate. Quite a surprise for Kenna as she wasn’t even aware she was a shifter too. She just thought she was nuts, possibly with a multiple personality disorder.

Abandoned as a baby Kenna learned to survive on her own, depending only on herself and doing a pretty good job of it, so finding a possibility of a family within the pack and also as Evo’s mate she was understandably a little thrown. But she’s an Alpha bitch (literally) and she deals with it pretty fast. Oh, and if Evo thinks he’s gonna wear the pants in this relationship – he’s got another thing coming.

For a short read it was pretty satisfying in terms of a flow. Things resolved quickly but I didn’t feel rushed, humor was nicely sprinkled here and there and supporting characters were written adequately. But…

Here’s where we should talk about the bad stuff.
First and foremost, editing. If there was none – there should definitely be an editor, and if there was one – he or she should be fired. The raw material wasn’t bad but it needed a lot of cleaning up. The overuse of a term alter-ego alone scratched on my nerves painfully, but there was other stuff like overexplaining and mixing up present and past tenses too.

And there was another thing that bugged me constantly. From the moment Kenna and Evo first met the suspect, they both refered to him using his first name. And it would’ve been ok if they were calling him by his name to his face, as an interrogation tactic, but no. They used his first name all the time, when discussing him or mentioning him to others. It felt wrong, not really authentic to the situation. I would imagine people in their shoes, an FBI agent and a PI, would call him by his last name or even full name.

There, I think that’s all I wanted to say.

Over and out

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